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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
consumption
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 of
barrales
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barrels
 of oil in millions by four
reigions
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regions
religions
 including
US
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the US
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,
China
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, Western
Europ
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Europe
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 and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East over a
periond
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period
 of 21 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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US
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the US
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 was the largest consumer among other nations,with approximately 10
million
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 in
year
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the year
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 2009,
while
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Middle
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 East
consumption
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 which was around 1.9
million
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at
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in
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 2009 contributed the lowest throughout the timeline.
Furthermore
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, When compared to
US
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the US
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and
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apply
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Western Europe and Japan, the use of oil rose gradually in
China
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 and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East. Looking at the details, the US Dominated the market share in 2009 with
the
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a
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 daily
consumption
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 of 10
million
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 barrels per year and the trend was
stedy
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steady
 until 2015, following a
significat
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significant
 decline until 2025 which is about 6
million
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of
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barrels and
this
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 trend will
further
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 continue until 2030, at 4
million
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 of barrels per day.
Similiarly
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Similarly
, a gradual increase
of
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in
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 oil
consumption
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 was
demostrated
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demonstrated
 by Western Europe and Japan.
On the other hand
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,
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China
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China's
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consuption
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consumption
 was depicted
a
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as a
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stedy
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steady
steadily
study
increased
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increase
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 and
it is
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peaked
at
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in
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 2025 with
50
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a 50
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% rise than it was
at
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in
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 2009, the same pattern followed by
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East until 2025.
In contrast
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 to
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East,
China
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will hope
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hopes
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 to have a trend reversal from 2025 and the market share will drop by 25%
at
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by
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 the year
of
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apply
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2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, china, middle, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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