In many countries, young people leave their parents’ home in their early twenties to go and live on their own, while others prefer to stay with their families until a later age. Do you think the advantages of young people living with their parents for longer outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a widely held view that the majority of the young prefer to experience living alone.

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why they decide to move out of their parent's

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and live alone. Even though some

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think

this

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can have disadvantages, personally believe that it is an experience that can have a big positive impact on young

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's lives.

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with, living alone can teach you so many

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especially if a person is in their early twenties.

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growing, we can learn from our mistakes and take that as a learning.

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, when a young person moves alone for the first time they can notice how difficult it is to administrate all of the

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expenditures like water, lights or paying the rent; the same happens with doing all the household core

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as cleaning, doing the laundry or washing the dishes. Having all of these experiences can help

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to notice that living alone requires a lot of effort,

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they learn how the reality of life is.

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, living with your parents until a later age can lead

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to not have personal growth and not experience real life. Whenever you live with your parents, most

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are easier

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the fact that you're not responsible for

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mainly the spending.

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, when live with your parents you don't have to clean the whole

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just your room, you go to the supermarket with them but don't pay for the groceries. Everything could be easier in economic aspects but you're not really aware of the cost of

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To conclude

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, even though everyone can make the decision to stay at their parent's

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until they're older, or live alone at a young age,

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last

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option can make you grow as an individual and make you realize

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that can be useful for your reality.

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Clarify your thesis statement to make it more specific about which advantages you believe outweigh the disadvantages. This will give your essay a clearer direction from the start.

coherence and cohesion

Consider using linking words and phrases to enhance the flow between your ideas, such as ‘Firstly’, ‘In addition’, ‘Furthermore’, and ‘On the other hand’. This will improve cohesion.

task achievement

Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your main points and provide clearer evidence of your claims.

task achievement

Your essay addresses the task and presents an opinion, which is essential for task achievement.

coherence and cohesion

The structure of your essay is logical with clear paragraphs, which helps in understanding your main ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

314 words

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In many countries, young people leave their parents’ home in their early twenties to go and live on their own, while others prefer to stay with their families until a later age. Do you think the advantages of young people living with their parents for longer outweigh the disadvantages?

Your opinion

Some people believe that traveling to other places is not essential to learn about different cultures as one can gain knowledge from books, movies, and the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

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