You want to join a local sports club but you would like some more information before joining. write a letter to the manager of the sport club. In your letter, say how you found out about this sport club, give details of an activity you want to do, ask some questions about the club.

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Dear Sir, I hope

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letter finds you well. I am writing to express my keen interest in joining your esteemed Golf Club, which I discovered through a friend who is an existing member. I have always been passionate about golf, as it challenges both physical precision and strategic thinking. Over the years, I have enjoyed the sport as a way to stay active, refine my skills, and connect with like-minded individuals. I am particularly interested in participating in the club’s upcoming golf training sessions. As an avid golfer, I see

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as a valuable opportunity to enhance my techniques, engage with fellow enthusiasts, and contribute to the club’s continued success. The reputation of your club,

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its impressive achievements and a strong sense of community, makes it an ideal place for me to grow as a player. Could you kindly provide more information regarding membership fees, training schedules, and upcoming events?

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, I would appreciate any details about the club’s history, mission, and values, as I am eager to understand more about its culture and vision. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response. Sincerely, Eneh Chidimma Bella

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph maintains a single focused idea to improve clarity.

Task Achievement

Consider providing a bit more detailed context about your experiences with golf in relation to your interest in the club, which could strengthen your response.

Task Achievement

The letter has an excellent formal tone appropriate for the context of a letter to a sports club manager.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your letter is well-organized with clear paragraphs that logically progress from one idea to the next.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

195 words

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You want to join a local sports club but you would like some more information before joining. write a letter to the manager of the sport club. In your letter, say how you found out about this sport club, give details of an activity you want to do, ask some questions about the club.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people?