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a friend of yours is a fitness instructor. you would like some advice about how to improve your own fitness. write a letter to your friend. in your letter - describe what you do now to keep fit. - explain why you want to improve your fitness. - ask some questions about how to improve your fitness write a least 150 words. you do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear______,

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Dear Sharan, How are you?It's been a
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,hasn't it? Hope you are doing good! I am writing
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 letter just to get some tips for my fitness. Nowadays,I am very busy with my job,owing to which I didn't get much time for my gym but
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 am walking and bicycling which seems not enough to be fit. Actually,
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 was so ill for the past week and was suffering from jaundice.I am on the way to recovering but the doctor suggests me proper diet and exercise to be healthy soon.That's why I planned to get some advice from you for my fitness.
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,Please suggest to me if
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 can take any side supplement for weakness or not. Plus, I am curious about my diet as well ,what kind of diet i should start ? I will be very
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 to you.I look forward to your reply. Your's sincerely, Jyoti Sharma

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction to explain your current fitness routine before mentioning your job, for better coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity and flow.
task achievement
Elaborate a little more on your fitness goals and why they are important to you to strengthen your task response.
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The letter has a friendly tone and effectively communicates your current fitness activities and concerns.
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You did a great job expressing your reason for seeking advice and asking specific questions.
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