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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table illustrates the data on the police budget
in
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 which the
money
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 came
from
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and the two pie charts describe the distribution of the amount in the two
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years 2017 and 2018 in an area of the UK.
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, there was an upward trend in all three different sources
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 the
money
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 spent on salaries was always the majority of contribution. Looking into more
details
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, the highest amount of
money
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 on the police budget belonged to the National Government, 175.5
million
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pounds
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 in 2017 and it kept rising to 177.8
million
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pounds
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 was followed by local taxes, at 91.2
million
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pounds
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 in 2017, after one year, it
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 significantly to 102.3
million
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pounds
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. In
term
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 of
the
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how the
money
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 was spent, the majority of the police budget goes to salaries which was for officers and staff, dropping slightly from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. Meanwhile, the proportion of buildings and transport remained
constantly
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, at 17% each year. An opposite pattern can be seen in the category of technology, its figure rose sharply from 8%
i8n
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in
 2017 to 14% in 2018, which was always the lowest rate during the given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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