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the chart shows eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

the chart shows eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.
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The graph illustrates the consumption of
three
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 specific types of sweet ingredients eaten which cause acid production in the mouth and might be the reason
of
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for
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 tooth decay (pH shows the levels of acidity).
It is clear that
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 the most dangerous product throughout the
40-minite
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40-minute
 period is
honey
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,
whereas
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 the least is cane
sugar
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.
Overall
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, all
three
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 types of
sugar
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 lead to the highest acid levels at the very beginning
as well as
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at the end
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 of
this
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 time period. Focusing first on the first 10 minutes after the consumption of sugars/
honey
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, at the moment of eating pH levels for all of them reach 7.0,
while
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afther
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after
 the next 5 minutes, the figures drop to roughly 3.5, 4.5, and 5.0 for cane
sugar
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, fruit
sugar
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, and
honey
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, respectively. During the following 5 minutes, they increase slightly to 4.0 and 5.0 for the first two categories,
whereas
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 for
honey
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 it
remaines
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remains
remained
 stable. As for the remaining half an hour, all
three
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 figures skyrocket, being higher than the level at which tooth decay is unlikely, with
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a pH-level
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pH-level
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pH level
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 of 7.0 for each of
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three
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the three
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 various sweet ingredients.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, honey, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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