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The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about the world population and distribution in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the data associated with the
world
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population
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 and its distribution between 1950 and 2000,
as well as
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 the situation predicted by 2050.
Overall
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, the total number of
people
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 living across the globe is increasing throughout the period.
It is clear that
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 the most populated areas by 2000 were
Asia
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 and Europe,
whereas
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 by 2050 Africa and
Asia
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 are expected to be the most attractive places for citizens. Focusing first on the general number of
world
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population
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, in 1950, there were 2,500,000 citizens on Earth,
while
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 by 2000,
this
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 figure increased by 3,500,000. When it comes to 2050, by
this
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 time, there
predicted
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are predicted
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 to be 9,000,000
people
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 in the
world
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. As for the density of
population
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 by
regions
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region
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, in 1950, the most popular areas were
Asia
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 and Europe, with roughly 60% and 20% of
people
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 choosing these areas,
while
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 by 2000, the
population
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 in Europe became almost 50% lower and by 2050 it is expected to be at the level of fewer than 10%,
whereas
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 in
Asia
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 the figure is stable throughout the whole period. Regarding Africa, between 1950 and 2000, the density of
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population
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the population
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 there increased from 9% to 13%, with the prediction of 20% by 2050. As for the remaining regions, the
population
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 in Oceania accounted for only 1% of the total amount of
people
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 residing
the
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in the
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world
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. In Latin America and North America, there lived less than 10% of
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population
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the population
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 throughout the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, people, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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