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The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club.

The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club.
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The bar chart illustrates the average number of
people
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 using a health
club
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 in Miami and Florida every month in 2017,
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 the pie chart shows the age groups attending
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club
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, broken up by gender.
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, the highest proportion of members attending the
club
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 was seen from June to September,
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 the lowest number of attendees was noticed between January and March,
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 in December.
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 the vast majority of members were under 45. Focusing first on the average monthly use of the
club
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, from January to May, the percentage of
people
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 attending it fluctuated between 500 and 600 for both genders. Notably, for women the figures were slightly lower in general. Starting from June,
people
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 worked out more
intensivelly
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intensively
, with over 800 men and 700 women
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 month.
This
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 situation remained stable up to the end of September. After that, the figures dropped to the initial levels of 600 males and 100 fewer females by December. As for the age groups, the most numerous sector was those from 21 to 45, with 50 to 55% of
people
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 of both sexes. When it comes to the members over 65, roughly 25 to 30% of them attended the health
club
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. The others accounted for 20% of the total number of
club
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 attendees.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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