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The maps below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

The maps below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.
The three maps compare changes in the first floor of a certain facility from 1958 to the present time.
Overall
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, the zone has been utilised and reconstructed for various purposes. The number of rooms decreased stage by stage, undergoing the modernisation process.
Initially
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, the territory was
the
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a
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 seven-roomed office between 1958 and 1984. The kitchen, manager's workplace and reception
situated
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were situated
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 in the eastern part,
while
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 the western workplaces were used for meetings,
toilet
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toilets
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 and
the
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apply
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workspaces for a secretary and an assistant. 
However
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, the layout of
apartment
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the apartment
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 from 1985 to 2000 depicts a substantial modification, leaving only the kitchen zone untouched
that
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at that
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 time and even later. The amenities were replaced by 2 bedrooms,
living
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a living
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 room and
bathroom
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a bathroom
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and
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apply
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making the place suitable
to live
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for
the
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a
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 small family. After 2000,
on the other hand
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, the spot was converted into
the
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a
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 flower store. There are a number of varieties of sectors for both commercial and entertaining uses. With the exception of playing, working, gift
cards
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card
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 selling and cooking zones, the vast majority of areas are filled
of
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with
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 plants today.

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