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The maps below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Angsa

The three maps compare changes in the first floor of a certain facility from 1958 to the present time.
Overall
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, the zone has been utilised and reconstructed for various purposes. The number of rooms decreased stage by stage, undergoing the modernisation process.
Initially
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, the territory was a seven-roomed office between 1958 and 1984. The kitchen, manager's workplace and reception were situated in the eastern part,
while
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 the western workplaces were used for meetings, a toilet and workspaces for a secretary and an assistant.
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, the layout of the apartment from 1985 to 2000 depicts a substantial modification, leaving only the kitchen zone untouched at that time and even later. The amenities were replaced by 2 bedrooms, a living room and a bathroom, making the place suitable for a small family settling in. After 2000,
on the other hand
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, the spot was converted into a flower store. Nowadays, there are numerous sections for both commercial and entertaining uses. The vast majority of areas are filled with plants, with the exception of playing, working, gift card selling and cooking sectors.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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