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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals duing 2014. Summaryse the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals duing 2014. Summaryse the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates the average monthly
change
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 in percentage of the
prices
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 of three metals including Copper
Nickel
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, Zinc in 2014.
In
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overall
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, the
prices
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 of
three
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the three
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 materials tended to less
change
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 in the middle of the
year
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while
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 they were more unstable at the beginning and the end of the
year
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 2014.
In addition
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,
Nickel
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 had the most
inconsistence
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inconsistency
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 in
price
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 over a
year
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. During the first half of 2014,
Nickel
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prices
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 saw an increasing trend in
prices
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 but tended to
change
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lesser
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 from 6% to 4% in the first 2 months,
then
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 the changes in percentages were more stable at around 0.5% - 1% from March to May before it suddenly fell to -3% in June.
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, the percentage of
change
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 in
price
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 of Copper compared to the previous month
on
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in
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 January was 2%,
then
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 it gradually increased in small amounts at around 0.5% - 1% from February to April
beforeit
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before
 began to decrease in May and June at the rate of -0.5%.
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 Zinc saw little changes in
price
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 in January, its
price
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increase
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increased
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3
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by 3
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% in February; its
price
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 kept increasing but
with
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 rate
at
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of
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 about 1%-2% before it decreased -1% in June. In the
last
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 6 months of 2014, monthly changes in
prices
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 of
Nickel
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 were reducing at constant rates, -1%, from July to October, but
then
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 its
price
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 increased again until the end of the
year
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.
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,
Cooper
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Cooper's
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price
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 experienced the same trend at constant rates at around -1% and -0.5 % for each month from July to October,
then
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 the
price
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 increased
1.5
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by 1.5
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% in November[. In](http://November.In) contrast, Cooper’s consumers saw
an
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a
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continuously
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continuous
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 increase in its
price
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 at a constant rate
at
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of
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 about 0.5% to 1.5 % during
this
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 period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, prices, nickel, year, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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