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The table below gives information about the values of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the values of exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table chart depicts the import
values
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 of kiwi to five countries namely
Japan
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,
China
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, Mexico, Russia and Saudi Arabia from New Zealand
during
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from
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 2010 to 2012.
Overall
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, The
value
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 of Kiwi imported by
Japan
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 was the highest from 2010 to 2012.
In contrast
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 , Saudi Arabia has the lowest ship
value
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 compared to the other four nations in all three years. The
values
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 of exports of kiwi to
Japan
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 have topped the list consecutively for three years with 271100000.00, 287400000.00, and 325300000.00.
Likewise
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,
Chinese
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the Chinese
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also
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 export
the
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apply
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fruit, but in
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comparison
comparsion
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 the
value
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 is less than around one-third of what the Japanese
exported
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.
Furthermore
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, Mexican ship
value
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 looks
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 deduced when compared to
China
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 with approximately less than 6,000,000.00 from 2010 to 2012. The transport
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 of Russia and Saudi Arabia are negligible, when compared to
Japan
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 or
China
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, as the approximate Russian and Arabian total export
values
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 are not even close to the one-year
values
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 of
Japan
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 or
China
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words values, japan, china, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export values
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuations
  • trends
  • consistent growth
  • overall trends
  • significant
  • notable patterns
  • highest export values
  • lowest export values
  • year to year
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