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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

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It is true that
people
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 have benefited from the development of transportation and delivery.
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, it is often neglected of the negatives that originate from
such
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 development. I believe only when
people
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 become aware of the drawbacks and take
actions
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 to tackle the problems, they can eventually achieve more positive effects. On the one hand, there are many advantages for
people
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's lives that come from the fast improvement of
transporation
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transportation
 means.
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, nowadays
people
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 can travel to any foreign
countries
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country
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 in a very short time compared to in the past.
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,
people
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 can
also
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 purchase goods from all over the world, even fresh seasonal fruits and vegetables
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 the fast airline delivery.
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this
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 reason, humans are living a better and more convenient life on the planet.
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,
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, the negative effects on the environment are ignored. The majority of
morden
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modern
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 vehicles are
depended
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 on fossil fuel, which is an important energy
powper
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power
 source.
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 the overuse and constantly increasing demand, the
envery
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energy
 resource is at risk of disappearing.
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, the application of massive vehicles has caused severe air pollution,
noice
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noise
 pollution and so on, which is a threat
for
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people
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's health.
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,
people
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 are
also
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 experiencing a worse living environment than before, which is in urgent need
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of
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 improvement. In conclusion,
although
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 with advances in modern transportation and delivery, the world is becoming a more enjoyable place to live,
to fix
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fixing
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pollution
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the pollution
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 problem is essential for
sustainable
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the sustainable
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 development of society.

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coherence
Ensure each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main point of the paragraph.
grammar
Make sure that spelling errors (e.g., 'morden' should be 'modern', 'noice' should be 'noise') are corrected to avoid distractions.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples to reinforce your main arguments, especially regarding the advantages and disadvantages of modern transportation.
content
You present a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of modern transportation.
content
Your argument about environmental concerns is relevant and important, reflecting awareness of contemporary issues.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • International relations
  • Economic growth
  • Efficient shipping methods
  • Global trade
  • Quality of life
  • Job opportunities
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Emergency response
  • Disaster relief
  • Tourism industry
  • Affordable and accessible
  • Cultural appreciation
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