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Writing Samples
Band 4

‘Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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There is no denying that
tourism
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 has a significant role in
connect
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connecting
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poeple
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people
 from different cultures . In light of
this
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 topic , there
is
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are
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 a lot of
people
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 who do not
beliefe
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believe
 that
tourism
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 could be
as
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a
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 footbridge
betweeen
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between
 the diverse cultures around the world.I extremely believe that
tourism
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 has a crucial
contribute
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in
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to
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 our huge earth .In
this
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essay
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 I will analyze my point of view and express the paramount of
the
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tourism
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 in introducing
people
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 from different nationalities . On one hand ,
tourism
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 could make a massive change
for
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in
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 the
country
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country's
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 knowledge . after paying a lot of money
on
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to
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 different sectors
by
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apply
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the government ,
government
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the government
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 should pay attention to
their
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tourism
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 sector .
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 , it is a brilliant plan to focus on introducing any country to other
civilisation
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civilisations
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. For
intance
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instance
, If the country knuckles on their tourist , they will achieve
an amazing results
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amazing results
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due to
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 their effort.
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,
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tourism
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 is a part of the human assertive .It is
also
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 possible to say that
the
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human
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humans
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is
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 curious about learning and searching for
another places
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another place
other places
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,so
the
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tourism
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 is
such
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 a similarity
between
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among
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the
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apply
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tourist
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tourists
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 because
the
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they
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 usually seek out
for
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apply
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the same information .
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, the British
people
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 can understand the Omani
people
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 because both of them have the same similarities in
the
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their
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 manners
such
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us
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as
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 the polite in dealing with
people
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. In conclusion,
tourism
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 is
such
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a
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 essential way to let
people
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 understand each other . Despite the differences
of
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in
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indivaduals
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individuals
individual
 views , I believe that
the
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tourism
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 has an incredible
contribute
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contribution
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in
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to
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 the whole world.

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Grammar
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'poeple', 'beliefe', and 'assertive'. These minor inaccuracies can detract from the overall clarity of your writing.
Content
Ensure your arguments are supported by more detailed examples or explanations. For example, instead of stating that tourism allows understanding, explain how specific interactions or experiences foster this understanding.
Style
Consider varying your sentence structure to enhance readability. Mixing simple and complex sentences can make your writing more engaging.
Content
You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential in task responses.
Coherence
Your essay has a recognizable structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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