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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of the UK population who watched
television
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 and listened to the
radio
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 at different times of the day in 1992.
Overall
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,
television
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viewership
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 increased significantly in the evening, reaching its highest point,
whereas
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radio
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 audiences fluctuated, peaking in the morning before gradually declining. In the early morning hours,
radio
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 had more listeners than
television
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. At 6:00 a.
m
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., around 5% of the population tuned in to the
radio
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, and by 8:00 a.
m
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.,
this
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 number surged to approximately 30%, marking its peak.
However
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,
after
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this
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 point,
radio
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 audiences steadily declined throughout the day, reaching around 15% at 1:00 p.
m
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., where it intersected with
television
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viewership
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. By the late evening, the percentage of
radio
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 listeners fell to nearly 0%.
In contrast
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,
television
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viewership
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 remained low in the morning, with fewer than 5% of the population watching. It started to rise after midday, surpassing
radio
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 at around 1:00 p.
m
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. and continuing to increase throughout the afternoon. The number of viewers peaked at approximately 45% around 8:00 p.
m
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., making
television
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 the most popular medium in the evening.
After
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this
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 peak,
viewership
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 gradually declined and reached nearly zero by midnight.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, radio, viewership, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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