You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

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Hello Mohammed, I hope

this

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letter finds you well. I would like to open my own company and I want to share with you the plan for my business.

To begin

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, I have got a lot of money recently,

Therefore

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, I was looking for a new business to invest my capital

and

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then

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I found in my area a lack of services,

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, I decided to open a new

coffee

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near

tmy

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house. I will be able to service all my neighbours. Because

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The

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coffee

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is necessary in life,

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, I see my neighbours go to buy a cup of

coffee

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from a way place and

also

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my family,

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, I found it a good idea. You have a chain of

coffee

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shops, I think you are an expert on

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side, So, I would like you to give me any

advices

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advice

or suggestions. If you wanted to be my partner I would appreciate it. Thank you, I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Saljj Sincerely

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coherence and cohesion

Try to organize your ideas more clearly in paragraphs; each paragraph should focus on a single point.

task achievement

Make sure to address grammatical errors to enhance the clarity of your message.

task achievement

You have a clear business idea and explain your motivation behind it, which is great!

suitable writing tone

Your friendly tone makes the letter engaging and personal, which is effective for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

168 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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