Your English is speaking friend has asked for your help with the college project. He’s doing about celebrating new year in different countries.. write a letter to your friend in your letter say how important new year is to people in your country describe how New Year’s celebrated in your country. Explain what you like about New Year’s celebrations in your country.

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Dear

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, Hope you and your family are doing well. I’m thrilled that you have chosen my country, Iran, for your lecture on different

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of celebrating New

Year

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. New

Year

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is the most important time of the

year

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all people get together and have lots of fun. Since our new

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is in March, when spring approaches and flowers and plants blossom, people become so excited for new beginnings.

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a wide range of traditions for cherishing the

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of the New

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some people prefer to travel around the country and visit historical landmarks during

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holiday, others just get together and play some

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and dance. To me, the most interesting part of celebrating the New

Year

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is to go to the city centre to watch the amazing fireworks.

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holiday I have the opportunity to hang out with my cousins and eat lovely local dishes. Anyway, I hope

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be helpful with your project. In case you

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any

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, feel free to contact me. Best wishes Tina

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Consider adding more specific examples of traditional New Year’s dishes or customs to enrich your description.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea more distinctly to improve clarity. For instance, separating the description of fireworks from the family gatherings could enhance coherence.

suitable writing tone

The letter has a warm and friendly tone, making it suitable for a personal communication.

complete response

You effectively highlighted the excitement associated with the New Year celebration, which adds a personal touch to your writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

182 words

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