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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the proportion of families with electrical appliances and the number of
hoursspent
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hours spent
 on completing domestic
choresin
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chores in
chores
 a nation from 1920 to 2019. In general, there was a dramatic increase in the number of
householdsin
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households in
households
 ownership of electrical appliances
whereas
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 households performing chores every
week
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 saw a
significantdecrease
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significant decrease
 over the years. One of the most prominent features is that families owning a refrigerator saw a significant growth of approximately 90% from 1920 to 1960. The rise remained steady starting from the year 1980. Another significant trend is that households in the ownership of a vacuum cleaner saw a dramatic increase of 70% by 2000.
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, there was a fluctuating
trendregarding
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trend regarding
trend-regarding
families
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family
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 using a washing machine, with an
overall
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 increasing trend over the decades. Regarding the amount of time spent on doing household chores, there was a sharp decrease from 50 hours per
week
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 in 1920 to 20 hours per
week
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 in 1960. The decline started to slow down
since
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in
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 1960, with only a slight drop to 10 hours per
week
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 by 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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