The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts demonstrate information about the rate of
household
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households
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that had electrical devices,
such
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as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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and how much time people spent on housework in a country in the period of time from 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, during
the
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time, the
percenatge
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percentage
of
households
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having electrical appliances increased,
while
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most people had refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners rather than washing machines. The rise in the number of
the
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appliances affected the number of hours that individuals spent
on
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doing work in their household, particularly the considerable decrease
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observed. To start, in 1920, 40% of
households
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had washing machines which was the maximum in comparison with other appliances.
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, the indicator did not experience
a
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rapid growth and the rate was equal to just a bit over
that
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70%.  
In contrast
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, sharp changes were seen in the amount of
households
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that owned refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners. No household had
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
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in 1920,
however
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, in the period of 40 years, the figure comprised 60%. In 1980, the rate reached 100% and remained stable for the following years. Whilst 30% of
households
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had
vacuum
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cleaners in 1920, in 2000, the proportion made up 100% and did not change afterwards. Clearly, the number of hours of housework moderately declined, as in 1920, people the figure was 50, but after a noticeable dip, it constituted 20 in 1960. By 2019, the figure decreased twice and accounted for 10 hours per week.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vacuum, households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership of electrical appliances
  • steadily increased
  • dramatically decreased
  • correlating the rise
  • became common
  • households
  • prevalence
  • technological advancements
  • increased affordability
  • household chores
  • labor-saving devices
  • allocated for housework
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