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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

1.Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Noise
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pollution
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 is one of the major
cause
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 of
pollution
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in
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these days.So, many people think that there should be proper rules
andregulation
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and regulation
and regulations
 on
noise
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control
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 and
on the other hand
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 few of them
beleive
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believe
 that no
restrcition
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restriction
 is required in making
noise
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.
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,
i
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 will elucidate both views in
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 paragraph and provide
opinion
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at the end
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. Nowadays, everyone is busy in their
proffessional
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professional
life
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 and
alot
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a lot
 of things running
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individuals
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mind
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minds
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 with which they need mental peace for their
heathly
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healthy
life
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.As per the recent research by the
pollution
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control
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 department rate of
noise
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pollution
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 shoots like a rocket as compared to other
poulltion causing
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pollution-causing
 agents, results people
suffered
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 from various hearing issues and even mental
diability
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disabilities
.Apparently, some strict regulations
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 required to keep
this
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 under
control
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.For
intance
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instance
,in India there is a city Chandigarh in
north
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the north
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,vehicles are not allowed to blow horns after 6
p.m
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p.m.
 and even though in parties or marriages no one is allowed to have loud music after 12
pm
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p.m. at
 night.
Individual
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 who
find
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the victim
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victim
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victims
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 is punished 5000Rs as a fine.
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, sometimes restriction on creating
noise
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 makes people feel that they are not able to enjoy or live their
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life
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lives
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in
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under
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 restrictions so
pupil
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pupils
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 want
freedom
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the freedom
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 to make
noise
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 as much as they can. To
sump
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sum
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 up
with
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apply
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,in my
opinion
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control
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must
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 and action
need
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 to be taken because everyone
is having
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has
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 a right to live their lives peacefully and
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without stress
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stress free
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stress-free
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 so discipline is very crucial to maintain a balance in daily
life
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grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy, especially with spelling errors and verb forms. For example, 'beleive' should be 'believe'.
coherence
Organize your paragraphs more clearly, perhaps by explicitly stating which view you're discussing at the beginning of each paragraph.
task achievement
Expand on your arguments and examples with more detail to strengthen your points.
content
The essay addresses both views of the topic, showing an understanding of the issue.
coherence
The personal opinion is clearly stated at the end, which is a positive aspect of the conclusion.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • noise levels
  • stress
  • disturb sleep
  • imposing legal restrictions
  • peaceful living environment
  • tolerance levels
  • personal freedom
  • business operations
  • designated quiet zones
  • commercial and industrial zones
  • urban areas
  • public awareness campaigns
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