You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to share my feedback

for

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the cafeteria food. First of all, I appreciate you for serving us warm meals at the college canteen. I take my lunch there

everyday

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. I like the

appetiziers

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appetisers

very much and

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the

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overall

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meal

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is very sumptuous.

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, for the

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few days, I have noticed that the quality of

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course is diminishing every day. The curries are very oily and food is being served cold. And

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side

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salad is not getting included in the meals.

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overall

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this

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is bringing down the experience of eating at

canteen

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. If I may suggest a few improvements, I would like to improvise on curries as they are the main part of the buffet. If curries can have more vegetables and less oil, it will make the meal very tasty.

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, serving it hot will make it

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scrumptious. For

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people, side salad is very important. Making it part of the menu

everyday

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will keep them happy and satisfied. I hope you will consider my suggestions. I am looking

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forward

to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sumit Dua

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Ensure to clearly elaborate on each point to enhance the depth of your suggestions.

coherence and cohesion

Try to maintain clear topic sentences for each paragraph for better flow.

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The letter follows the appropriate format and has a polite tone, which is commendable.

coherence and cohesion

You have effectively communicated your likes and concerns about the cafeteria, which is essential for the reader's understanding.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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firstly
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

197 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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