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Many things used to be done in the home are now being done by machines. What are the pros and cons of this trend

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In the developing technological era,
machines
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 are
replaced for
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 humans in countless sectors,
house
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 is not an exception
for
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to
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this
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.
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 there are certain benefits to
this
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 tendency, I would argue that they are eclipsed by the disadvantages. On the one hand, there are
number
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a number
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 of positive effects,
such
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 as
,
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time
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 saving and increased productivity. Most of the
house
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 chores would take a lot of
time
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 for an individual to complete
that
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however
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, how ever
machines
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 can work faster and more accurately than humans, which saves a lot of
time
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 and
make
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makes
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 it possible for the person to use
this
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time
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 on another important thing or he can rest for a
while
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. On account of that, the productivity increases a lot. Nowadays
machines
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 do not require that much attention, we can let the machine
to
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apply
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complete the task.
For example
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,
rice
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a rice
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 cooker would take 25-30 minutes to cook, in the
mean
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meantime
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time
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 you can arrange your wardrobe or clean your
house
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.
Conversally
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Conversely
, I contend that the drawbacks are significant as
much
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as the benefits.
To begin
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 with, As
machines
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 are
replaced
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replace
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to do
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apply
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the
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apply
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households,
the
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apply
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health
concern
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concerns
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is
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are
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 significantly increasing. In order to maintain
a
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apply
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good health condition, some folks would prefer a gym. In which, we have to spend more
time
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 than we saved. Many experts state that
,
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apply
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 doing
house
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 chores all by
our selves
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ourselves
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 is a great exercise. Another biggest drawback is that
,
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apply
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 it may increase the family
gab
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gap
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 between the inner family. A good illustration of
this
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 is,
while
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 cleaning the
house
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, all of the
house
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 members would do it together, which would
decreases
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decrease
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 the family
gab
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gap
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. In conclusion,
although
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machines
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 help us to increase
the
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apply
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productivity and save some
time
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, it would affect our health condition and
it
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apply
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may create a
gab
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gap
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 in
inner
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the inner
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 family. So when someone
buy
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 a machine for their
house
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, they should weigh these carefully.

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Consider adding more detailed examples to substantiate your points, as this will enhance your argument and make it more convincing.
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You provide a balanced view of the pros and cons, which indicates critical thinking.
coherence
Your introduction and conclusion summarize the main ideas well, establishing a clear structure.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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