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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selcting and reporting the main features.
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The line graph displays the average release of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per capita in a few different countries which includes the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Portugal's value steadily increased,
while
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 the United Kingdom's decreased. Sweden's
carbon
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dioxide
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 emission fluctuated widely throughout the period
while
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 Italy had a slight fluctuation and remained constant towards the end. Portugal started the period with a
carbon
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dioxide
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 emission valuation of approximately one metric tonne and
this
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 consistently moved up in value
year
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 on
year
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 to reach a peak of roughly 5 metric tonnes and gradually increased with a slight difference from the
year
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 1997 to 2007.
On the other hand
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, the United Kingdom began the recorded period with a very contrasting value of around 11 metric tonnes and dropped slowly every
year
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, until it reached a low of about 9 metric tonnes in 2007. Sweden's
carbon
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dioxide
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 emission was just valued below 9 in 1967 and increased dramatically to 10 in the
year
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 1977 before plummeting to around 5 in 2007.
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 that, Italy had a constant increase for the first 10 years
along with
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 a rise to a slight extent from 1977 to 1997 and remained unchanged after that.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average per capita
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • period/stable
  • turning point
  • fluctuations
  • environmental policies
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • sustainable practices
  • emission reduction targets
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy sources
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