People nowadays are buying wider range of household things (for example television, rice cooker) than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? #people #range #household #television #rice #cooker #development

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These days individuals are buying a wider range of household

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than in the past.

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is largely a negative development, and my reasons will be explained below. In the past decade variety in every aspect of shopping has increased and household

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are not an exception.

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the advancements in technology, there are more brands and the number of

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manufactured

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inclined

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increased

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, earlier there were

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only a few TV brands like Sony and Samsung but now the market is flooded with different TV brands. Consumers are attracted by

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, so even if they already have a television at their home they will buy another one.

People

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do not realise that

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wastage

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of money.

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nowadays do not understand the difference between what is necessary and what is a luxury.

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this

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, individuals are focused on status symbols. One considers himself inferior to others if they do not have the latest fridge in his home.

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, one gets influenced by others and buys the same expensive sofa but he does not really need it. He wants to show off in the society.

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, these

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come with a lot of

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packaging

and

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do not garbage it correctly.

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fail to understand that we are depleting our natural resources.

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the consumption more

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the litter.

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, consumption of household products has jumped in the past years and

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has impacted our society negatively as it is

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a wastage

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wastage

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of money and it is causing harm to

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the environment

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Task Achievement

Ensure that your introduction clearly states whether you believe the development is positive or negative, as well as briefly outlining your reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure to use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. This will help improve the flow of your essay.

Task Achievement

Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, you could mention specific statistics or studies related to consumer behavior.

Task Achievement

The essay presents a clear position and reasons for viewing the increase in household item purchases as a negative development.

Coherence and Cohesion

The structure of the essay is logical, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

261 words

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People nowadays are buying wider range of household things (for example television, rice cooker) than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? #people #range #household #television #rice #cooker #development

Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world. The ordinary people can get no advantage with the development of air travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much as from books, films, and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

some individuals advocate for improving public transportation systems as a means to reduce traffic congestion and air pollution. Conversely, others argue that private cars offer more convenience and freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.