IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to the local council about plans to close a children's playground in your area in your letter, you should: -say why children are not using the playground -Explain how important the playground is for the local community -Suggest how the playground could be improved

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the plans that closing the
children
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playground
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 in my community. I have come to
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children
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's
playground
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 with my son three times
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 month, and I found that only
few
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a few
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children
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 come and play.
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, I made a survey,
answering
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 by
children
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 in our area.
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, the major reason
in
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for
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results
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result
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 is that the facilities are old and dirty. In our community, only
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playground
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 has
the
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 suitable position for
children
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 to play.
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playground
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 is a
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few stones
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stones
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 away from my home and is located in the
center
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 of the community. Undoubtedly, it is
essencial
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essential
 for
children
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 to play and chat. To address these problems, I would like to suggest
that
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apply
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closing
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playground
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 in order to
improving
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improve
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 the facilities.
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, changing to new
facilties
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facilities
 is
neccessary
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necessary
 to have a nice scenery.
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, I hope that the council should organize a meeting to solve the period cleaning problem. I look forward to
receive
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 your response. Please let me know if you require any
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 information. Yours
fauthfully
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faithfully
, Mary

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language
Make sure to use the correct form of verbs; for example, it should be 'plans to close' instead of 'plans that closing'.
content
Ensure that you provide clear reasons and details to support your main points. For instance, elaborating on why the playground is important to the community could strengthen your argument.
structure
Try to break your sentences into simpler, clearer parts to improve readability. Avoid run-on sentences.
content
The letter has a clear purpose, which is to address the playground issue, and your concern for the community is evident.
content
You effectively proposed a solution by suggesting improvements, showing initiative and consideration for the community's wellbeing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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