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The table shows information on consumer spending on different iteams in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the main features and make ocmparison where relavent.

The table shows information on consumer spending on different iteams in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the main features and make ocmparison where relavent.
The table illustrates the percentage of national consumer
expenditure
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 in five
countries
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 in 2002, categorized into three sectors:
food
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, drinks, and tobacco; clothing and footwear; and
leisure
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 and
education
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.
Overall
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,
food
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, drinks, and tobacco accounted for the highest spending across all
countries
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,
while
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leisure
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 and
education
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 had the lowest
expenditure
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. In terms of
food
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, drinks, and tobacco,
Turkey
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 had the highest
expenditure
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 at 32.14%, followed by Ireland at 28.91%.
In contrast
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, Spain (18.80%), Italy (16.36%), and Sweden (15.77%) recorded significantly lower spending in
this
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 category. Regarding clothing and footwear, Italy led the spending with 9.00%,
whereas
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 Sweden had the lowest
expenditure
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 at 5.40%. Spain (6.51%), Ireland (6.43%), and
Turkey
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 (6.63%) had relatively similar figures in
this
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 category.
Leisure
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 and
education
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 had the lowest
expenditure
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 in all five
countries
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.
Turkey
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 recorded the highest spending at 4.35%,
while
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 Spain had the lowest at just 1.98%. The remaining
countries
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 had similar expenditures, ranging between 2.21% and 3.22%. In summary, essential goods
such
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 as
food
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 and beverages dominated consumer spending, particularly in
Turkey
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 and Ireland,
while
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 non-essential categories
such
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 as
leisure
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 and
education
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 remained the lowest across all five nations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, countries, food, leisure, education, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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