Some people think it is best to live in the vertical city where there are a lot of tall buildings. Other people think we should live in the horizontal city where there are few tall buildings. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Now unanimously suggest that some
people
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say that living in the
cities
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with
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apply
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surrounded by
heighted
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tall
buildings
it
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is best
whereas
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other public
argue
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by saying that staying outside in
residential
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a residential
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area
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areas
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with some buildings
are
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good. So, here I will
endeavor
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shed
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some light on my
view point
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viewpoint
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. The main advantage
for
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of
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living in
city
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the city
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are
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that you save
a lots
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a lot
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of time from
travling
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travelling
to
office
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the office
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or from traffic so
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this
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these
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are the small things
but
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that
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matters
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in day today life.
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you are
to
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too
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close to markets in
cities
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.
Futhermore
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,
but
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this
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overweigh
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overweighs
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the
disavantages
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disadvantages
where
this
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tall building does look fancy but finishes the fresh air and
enviornment
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environment
.
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in crowded areas in
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cities
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cities,
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we can not see
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a natual
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natual enviornment
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natural environment
friendly
space
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spaces
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to sit and
relex
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relax
for
kids
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or
smalls
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small
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children.
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, a person
live
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lives
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in
okaland
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Okaland
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with
kids
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so
kids
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need
free
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a free
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area to play but in
cities
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place
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places
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and
appartments
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apartments
are too small with high rented
price
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prices
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per month.
People
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live in
cities
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because they like city life
near by
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nearby
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close to office, close to public
transpotation
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transportation
but traffic
issue
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issues
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also
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this
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these
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places become risky because of homeless
people
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living. The
advantages
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advantage
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to live
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of living
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in horizontal
cities
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is to stay in
quite
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quiet
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in
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apply
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silent
place
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places
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where
people
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enjoy their
life
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lives
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. Few building gives
good
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a good
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enviornment
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environment
with big spacious
house
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houses
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where
kids
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and play.
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,
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it comes with its
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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travel time get increase for your
work place
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workplace
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also
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basic shopping
also
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get
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gets
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distanced.
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,
People
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living an inidan family lives in
santa rosa
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Santa Rosa
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and
office
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the office
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is in
dublin
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Dublin
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hard to travel daily with 2 hours of drive
at
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apply
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on
side
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one side
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but had
benefit
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the benefit
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of purchasing
home
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a home
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with
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at
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lower rates. conclusion, In my point
people
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need to think and
surrounded
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being surrounded
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by
building
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buildings
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gives
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to connect with new corporate
people
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with so many
opportunity
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opportunities
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so
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to
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do new
thing
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things
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its
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it
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the
benifit
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benefit
benefits
of staying in
city
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the city
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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea with supporting details that follow logically.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling. There are multiple spelling errors (e.g., 'heighted' should be 'tall', 'enviornment' should be 'environment'), which can distract the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Try to provide a more balanced view. You could explicitly address the pros and cons of both living situations in separate paragraphs before presenting your opinion.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and elaborate on your points. For instance, discussing specific aspects of city life or rural life can strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of both lifestyles is a good effort and shows critical thinking.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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