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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this

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Nowadays, there
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 a greater increasing amount of
people
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have
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an interests
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interests
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on
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in investigating their
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history
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 in many nations. As
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 phenomenon becomes more and more common, many
people
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 want to know why it happened and how to research
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it, so I will explore the explanation of the reason
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 the importance of
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history
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 and researching methods like surfing
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the internet and reading
history
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 books. The key reason is about the importance of the
history
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. In recent years, the development of
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science and technology has become much more powerful, it
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the
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people
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, no matter
in
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which
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their
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 age, start to forget the past slowly.To solve
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 problem, the government started to make some strategies
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for
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 historical
educations
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education
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 and
benefits
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on
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 social activities about
history
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.
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, more and more universities and high schools
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 to increase the
history
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 courses and majors.what’s more, some communities have already organized the elder group
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 to the
history
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 museum for free. So it makes
people
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’s desire
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 their living place in the past
more
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stronger.
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, there are
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 some other reasons.As price inflation, some residents are motivated to know their house’s value so that they can have some ideas on the time and chance to sell it. In
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 situation,
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history
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become
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 the first important thing to estimate the price as historical architectural significance can increase its market value. Turning to practical methods, there are several effective ways for individuals to investigate the
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 of their homes. The first approach must be using
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science and technology
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by
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artificial intelligence which is the most convenient and effective way to research something.
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, there is a shortage
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 is hard to
finding
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 some ancient and
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 information, so another useful option is reading books. By the way, it is easy to buy some
professional related
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 books nowadays.
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, going to
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the library
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for studying
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to study
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 historical buildings is
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 a good method. In brief, government encouragement and house price inflation are the main reasons
of
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 the cause of increasing residents wanting to
finding
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 out the
history
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 of the house they live in.
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,
people
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 can research the basic information on the internet and study some details from the book.

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language
Consider removing unnecessary phrases and correcting grammatical inconsistencies. For instance, instead of 'a greater increasing amount of people have interests on in investigating,' you could say 'an increasing number of people are interested in investigating.'
coherence
Try to structure your essay more clearly with distinct paragraphs for each main point. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and attempts to explore reasons as well as research methods, which shows understanding of the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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