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Band 4

Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead f going to an office every day. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 and disadvantages of
people
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do
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 their
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time
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 of going to an
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 every day. Now I will talk about the
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 of
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 their
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 every day. First,
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 can
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avoid
 wasting
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 on
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traffic
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People
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 can use
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time
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 for rest ,
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prepare
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contect
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contract
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 or start working earlier.The second advantage is some
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 are early
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 and some of them are
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owl
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People
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 who are early
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 can wake up and
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 early. And they mostly have
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higher
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 who are
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night
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owl
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. They mostly will have
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by
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 modern technology can care
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for those
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people
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is
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night
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owl
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. It can
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 increase the
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definition
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. The
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advantages
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 is
people
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 can do their
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 anytime anywhere. If
people
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work
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 in some creative job
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 in anytime anywhere can help them so much. Because when they have
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 some ideals, they can
work
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 at that moment. Without these
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, there are some disadvantages on
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then
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work
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office
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the office
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work
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mean
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 no employees looking for
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an employer
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. Some
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employers
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 will be lazy
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 it will decrease the
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definition
 of
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.
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work
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 will decrease the relationship between employees and
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. Because they seldom
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other
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face-to-face. In
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conclusion
,there are
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 and disadvantages of
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work
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work
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working
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office
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the office
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language
Make sure to use correct verb forms and subject-verb agreements. For example, 'people do their work from home more time' should be 'people do their work from home more often'.
language
Try to avoid spelling errors as they can distract the reader (e.g., 'travfie' should be 'traffic').
structure
Ensure clear separation between advantages and disadvantages in your paragraphs, and consider providing a clearer structure overall. Using headings might help clarify the sections of your essay.
content
Expand on your ideas with more details and examples to enhance clarity and depth of your arguments. For example, explain how working from home can improve creativity further.
task achievement
You have made a genuine attempt to address both advantages and disadvantages of working from home, which demonstrates a clear understanding of the task.
task achievement
Your points are relevant to the topic and you show an awareness of different working styles, which is commendable.

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