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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preference to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different views about the preference to
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 whether in a small or large company. I will examine both views
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 my point of view that working in big institutions is a beneficial decision as there is more room for professional progression
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 higher income and more challenging and time-consuming
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 in return. On the one hand, working in big organizations is an opportunity to excel in professional skills by dealing with highly sophisticated projects. The competitive atmosphere of populated businesses will drive employees to promote their academic skills as they will mostly provide funds to contribute to individuals who are studying for higher degrees or eager to get promotions.
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, the broadened market of
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 businesses will offer
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work
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 abroad programs that will not only enhance their cultural acknowledgement and provide higher salaries but
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 represent other countries' advancements that could be applied to their strategies. Over time, anyone by utilizing those opportunities could achieve a significant advancement in their professional
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.
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, being occupied in small enterprises is an approach to stabilize daily
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 as it requires fewer working hours and is more flexible in daily programs because they are not
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struggling with
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 customers.
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, they are more enable to be creative in projects as they are not limited to expectations and strict deadlines.
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 ,they could spend more time with their family and friends as they have
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less stressful
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life
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 which is one of the main reasons most people prefer
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 type of organization. In conclusion,
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 working in a small corporation might facilitate some of
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's challenges, I do believe that working in challenging circumstances alongside a high salary and potential promotions is a worthy preference.

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Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction to guide the reader through your argument more explicitly.
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Work on ensuring that your ideas are supported with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments.
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Use more linking words and phrases to improve the overall flow and connection between your ideas, ensuring smoother transitions.
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Try to avoid repetitive structures and vocabulary; varying your language can make your arguments more engaging and dynamic.
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You have presented a balanced discussion by addressing both sides of the argument before stating your opinion.
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Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy for the reader to follow your thoughts.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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