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The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and Non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and Non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The below bar graph illustrates the
production
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 of the world's
oil
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 in
OPEC
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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 countries. The blue bars represent
OPEC
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Middle
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 East, the red bars correspond to
Non-
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OPEC
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, and the yellow bars indicate other
OPEC
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. Between 1980 and 2000,
non-
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OPEC
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had
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produced
oil
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 from approximately
3million
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3 million
barrels
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 to 12
million
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barrels
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,
whereas
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OPEC
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Middle
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 East had just over 1
million
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barrels
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.
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,
in
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between 2000 to 2010
OPEC
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Middle
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 East had about 15
million
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barrels
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,
while
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 other
OPEC
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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 had remained equally. By the end of the period, between 2010 and 2020, other
OPEC
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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 witnessed a drastic decline,
whereas
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OPEC
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Middle
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 East had experienced a
dramatical
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 peak. So, we can observe
OPEC
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Middle
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 East
had
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 increased their
production
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.
Overall
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,
OPEC
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Middle
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 East
oil
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 manufacture had surged over the years,
whereas
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non-
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OPEC
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 and other
OPEC
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 had decreased their
oil
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production
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.
Hence
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, global
oil
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production
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 is developed only in
OPEC
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Middle
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 East countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, opec, non-opec, middle, million, barrels with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World oil production
  • OPEC (Organization of Petroleum Exporting Countries)
  • Non-OPEC countries
  • Trends
  • Data analysis
  • Comparison
  • Oil reserves
  • Barrels per day
  • Percentage share
  • Production capacity
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak
  • Rise/increase
  • Decline/decrease
  • Over time
  • Crude oil
  • Export
  • Market dynamics
  • Energy sector
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