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Ambition is being emphasized in today’s society. How important do you think it is for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

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These days,
ambition
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 become a major part of every individual's
life
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.
This
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 essay will discuss in detail that goal plays a significant role in
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life
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 of a
person
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 who wants to grow. I believe that it has a positive impact.
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 with, I believe that
ambition
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work
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works
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 as a director, who gives direction to human beings to become
sucessful
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successful
 in
life
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.
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, Virat Kohli, a famous cricketer was very ambitious in his childhood, and he left his house to
fullfil
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fulfil
 his dream and now is one of the best
cricketer
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 in the world. It shows that
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person
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a person
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 with
a
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an
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 aim has one direction in their
life
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 and they
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work
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works
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 step by step
fulfill
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 that goal.
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, no aim in
life
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cause
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causes
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 depression as people are lost and do not know what to do in their
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. It is proven that ambitious people have no stress as
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 to unambitious ones. Moving
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, it is a positive thing for almost everyone who has dreams.
Achieveing
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Achieving
goal
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a goal
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 gives a sense of accomplishment.
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, one of my
friend
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friends
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 Janmeet who always wanted to become an IAS officer, and currently she is working as an IAS officer in Delhi, India, just because of her hard
work
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, and determination. As people put
their
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in their
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 efforts, and do hard
work
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 to become
sucessful
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successful
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life
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and
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apply
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tough competition teaches them to
work
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 even harder.
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, when any
person
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 in society
have
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has
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name
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a name
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 and fame, they feel proud of themselves.
To conclude
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, I personally that if a
person
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have
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has
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 an
ambition
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 is more stable in their lives, as they start working towards their
ambition
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.
Overall
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, it
a
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is a
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positive development and gives positive outcomes.

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grammar
Ensure to maintain subject-verb agreement; for example, use 'ambition becomes' instead of 'ambition become'.
structure
Work on the consistency of ideas in your introduction and conclusion. Make sure they align with the body content to reinforce your main argument.
development
Expand on your ideas by providing more in-depth explanations and examples. This will help strengthen your arguments and improve clarity.
content
The essay presents a clear opinion that ambition has a positive impact on success, which is essential for task achievement.
examples
Including examples from real-life experiences, such as Virat Kohli and your friend, strengthens your arguments effectively.
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