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In most countries around the world, children begin learning the English language at school from the primary level. What are the advantages and disadvantages of teaching the English language to children at an early age?

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In many nations around the world , kids commence to study the
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 at school from an early age. in that essay it will be discussed
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benefits,
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 the children`s think will be formed
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english
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 and in the future
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won`t be difficult. generally
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 the kids` brains
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 sooner because their
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 receptive at a high level and their
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quickly
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 natural learning method was
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 at school time.
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learning
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 stress ,because children
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 at the same time and
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viorica
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mariana
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thoughtthat
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thought that
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 intellect most strength . 87%of young people and 55% of old people have the ability to learn in the end: it is better to learn a
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 at a young age because it is faster and less stressful

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coherence and cohesion
Strengthen your introduction and conclusion. Make sure your introduction outlines what the essay will discuss, and your conclusion should summarize your main points clearly.
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It would be helpful to provide more specific examples to support your arguments. While you mentioned some theories, try to explain how they relate to your points in more detail.
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You introduce the topic clearly and state that you will discuss both advantages and disadvantages, which sets a good context for your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • creative thinking
  • problem-solving
  • proficiency
  • global lingua franca
  • career prospects
  • cultural awareness
  • mother tongue
  • disparities
  • cognitive overload
  • linguistic diversity
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • pedagogical approaches
  • curriculum design
  • language acquisition
  • global mobility
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