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Band 7

Write a letter expressing your interest in a job in a different country. Write to a job recruiter. Your letter should include: •Why you want to work abroad •What type of job you want to have •Questions about working abroad

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in working in Canada. I want to
work
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 abroad to broaden my horizon of knowledge and for future settlement
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also
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. I think that Canada is a good country for
work
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 culture and weather.
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, my husband has been living in Canada for the
last
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 three years and I want to help him financially
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 by working there. I have a Medical degree from the Rayat Bhara Medical University and I
also
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 have 5 years of
work
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 experience in the same field. I want to
work
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 there as a medical assistant, as
this
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 job is relevant to my previous
work
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 experience. Here, I have lots of questions in mind, what documents are needed to start
work
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 there, I have a three-year
work
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 permit, and Before joining the Job, I can submit the travel ticket, which ensures my date of joining. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely,

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Task Achievement
Consider adding a brief introduction about your background and skills related to the position you seek, as this would help strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph stays focused on a single idea and elaborates on it for clarity. For example, the first paragraph combines several points in a somewhat loose manner.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to maintain a consistent level of formality in your language. For instance, phrases like 'my husband has been living' could be rephrased for a more formal tone.
Task Achievement
The intention to work abroad for personal and family reasons is clear and well-articulated.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is polite and maintains a respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for a formal job inquiry.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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