Some people think that all University students should study whatever they like. Others belive that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss these both view and give your own opinion.

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that. increase
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demands
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medicine
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jobs for doctors and nurses.
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major they love and
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about it will be more creative in their
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burnout or depression. The
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must have the freedom to choose their major
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