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The charts below show the changes in the ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in the ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of electrical appliances
use
Wrong verb form
used
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 and the amount of time spent doing the house chores in households
in
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apply
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.
Overall
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, the percentage of washing
machine
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machines
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increases
Wrong verb form
increased
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 from 40% in 1920 to 70% in 2019 with a single decrease to 60% between 1960 and 1980.
Linking Words
However
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However,
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 the percentage of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner use
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 considerably from 0% and 30% for each one after
each
Correct determiner usage
the
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 other to 100% in 1980 to stay constant till 2019 .
In
Linking Words
addition
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addition,
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there's
Wrong verb form
there was
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 a decrease
of
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in
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number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of hours of housework from 50 hours per week to 10 hours per week between 1920 and 2019 .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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