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Band 2

International tourism is growing rapidly, helping economies develop. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, International visitors
is
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 increasing significantly, which assists
to
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grow
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the
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 economy of the
country
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This
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phenomeon
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phenomenon
 has
its
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both pros and cons including earning foreign currency and
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helping
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 in
infrastartcure
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infrastructure
.
however
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, it
also
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 has some drawbacks like
follow blindly
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western
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culture
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 and
increase
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the
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criminal activity.
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,
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 it has some
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
, I believe
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the positive
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sides
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 outweigh
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the negative
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sides
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. On the one hand, there are myriads of positive aspects of international tourism.
Firstly
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, It helps to
boosts
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 the economy of the
country
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. when visitors come from different
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country
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countries
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 they spend
money
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and
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apply
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which helps to earn some foreign currency.
For instance
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, during their stay and visit,
tyhey
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they
 spend their
money
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 on
differnet thingfs
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different things
 like restaurants,
clotehs
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clothes
cloths
 and many more and
thsi
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this
money
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help
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in
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he economy of the
country
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.
Furtehrmore
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Furthermore
,
genmerated
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generated
generate
money
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 can utilize
on
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 the development of
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country
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the country
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. It
also
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ahs
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has
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 some
drwabakcks
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drawbacks
 like westernized
culture
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 and forget own
culture
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. people can imitate foreign
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culture
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cultures
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 and
tehy
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they
 are likely to persuade by
westen
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western
 dress and cultures like smoking,
dress
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dressing
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 and
amny
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many
any
 more and which leads to
forget
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 their own
culture
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grammar
Ensure that you use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling throughout your essay. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use complete sentences.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further and ensure that you provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and presents a clear opinion that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
There is an attempt to address both sides of the argument, which is a good practice for IELTS essays.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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