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Band 4

Governments should provide everyone with free healthcare. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 about
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whether
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 the government
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should
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responsible
 for providing unpaid
healthcare
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 for the citizens. I agree that
healthcare
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 is a
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necessity
 and right for all citizens ,
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, government should cover the
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cost
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healthcare
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 for
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critical
 patients. 
Healthcare
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 is an
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essential
 aspect of quality of life. A country with healthy citizens will most likely have
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 productive and higher quality of life.

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task achievement
Develop your argument further by exploring the implications of providing free healthcare, such as economic benefits or social equality.
coherence
Enhance the logical flow between your ideas by using linking words and phrases effectively, e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition', etc.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or data to support your arguments about healthcare and its impact on society.
task achievement
You have clearly stated your opinion on the topic, which helps establish your position.
coherence
The introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion on healthcare rights.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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