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Some people are making new friends by using socializing network websites and internet chat rooms.Some people say that this is a good thing.Others say that people should make new friends by face to face chat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A lot of
people
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 use social media to make new
friends
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 through different
chatting
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 rooms.
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 others believe that to make new
parteners
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partners
you have to meet them in real life and have face-to-face conversations. In my opinion , face-to-face conversation is the best approach to make new relationships, because the person that you will meet has a clear background and it will improve the emotional connection. Most social media websites have chat rooms or direct messages, and
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people
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 start to make a huge number of
friends
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 through their accounts matching their energy and vibes. Social media make it easy to communicate with
people
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 from different countries and share interests in any aspect.
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, making
friends
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 by using social accounts could help you to learn a new language and culture related to your new friend.
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instagram
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 is a website to share pictures and videos
people
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 can follow you from around the world. They can send you gifts or
invitation
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 to new collaborations. Face-to-face communication is the traditional form to add new
friends
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 to your circle, by meeting them in college or work and sharing the same energy. The pros of
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 approach
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, you will never meet someone you do not know his or her background. So it is safer to know who are you talking with and if they are lying about their identity .The other advantage is the emotional connection and direct response, body language will be clear to you during the talk.
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 , eye contact during talking can show the person's mood . In conclusion, one idea to make a friend is using online chatting which helps to contact
people
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 from different areas and learn from them. The old way is by face-to-face conversation with a clear identity and emotion , that considered the best means to start a new relationship.

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coherence
Ensure to have a clear and logical flow in your paragraphs. Consider using linking words to improve transitions between ideas.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion in your introduction, which helps set the reader's expectations.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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