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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the proportion of the
population
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 in four different regions in Asia where
people
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 chose to live in urban areas between 1970 and 2020 .There are
also
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 projections for 2030 and 2040 .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all of the four countries experience significant growth in the upcoming years . With regard to the two countries that had more than 30% of
people
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 live in
cities
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 back in 1970 . The Philippines in 1970 was the highest country and the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 living in urban areas was little more than 30% .
Subsequently
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 , it continued to rise until it reached 50% of
people
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 living in the centre in 1990 .After that , it dropped to approximately 40% . In 2030 and 2040 , the
population
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 of Philippine residents who are selected to live in
cities
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 will probably increase . The
population
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 of Malaysian
people
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 who live in town was roughly 30% but it went up considerably from 30% in 1970 to 80% in 2020 .It is predicted that the proportion of Malaysia's
population
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 living in urban regions will go up sharply to 90% . Turning to the countries that had less than 20% of
people
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 live in urban
cities
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 in 1970,the
percentage
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 of Thai
people
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 living in
cities
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 in 1970 was well below 20% and it climbed gradually to 30% .It is likely that the
percentage
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 of the Thai
population
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 will grow to 40% in 2030 and to 50% in 2040 . Indonesian
people
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 living in a town in 1970 were around 12% .Next , it increased noticeably to just over 50% in 2020 . By the year 2030 and 2040 , the
percentage
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 of Indonesian residents living in
cities
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 will have risen to almost 60% .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, cities, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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