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Band 3

Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate students or for those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Today, the cost of getting a higher
education
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university
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 is very high. Generally, I agree that
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university
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 fees should be reduced, particularly for
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students
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 who are less fortunate and who come from rural areas. Getting a good
education
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 is a part of human rights that should be supported by all of the stakeholders, including a
university
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. There are so many
students
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 who have great
potentials
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 but they unfortunately do not have enough resources to take an
education
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 in a good
university
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. By reducing
university
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 fees, those unfortunate
students
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 can have the opportunity to grasp their dreams.
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 its best services, a
university
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 must
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 some efforts
such
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 great
infrastructures
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;
do
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many
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researches
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;
create
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high quality
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 human resources; and so on. To
do
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 those efforts, the
university
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 needs
much
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 resources, including capital. So
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, usually, the more
advance
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 and reputable a
university
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, the more expensive its fees. To overcome the problem of giving a
well
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education
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for
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 the unfortunate
student
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students
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 in
this
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of
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solution is
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university
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 may give
scholarship
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scholarships
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 or financial aid
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 those unfortunate
students
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. The
university
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 can
also
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cooperation
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 with
government
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 and financial
institution
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institutions
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 in giving support
for
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 those unfortunate
students
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.

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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, but it could be strengthened by exploring more detailed arguments and examples to support your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly relates to your main argument and consider adding transition phrases to improve flow and clarity.
task achievement
You may want to clarify some of your sentences for better readability, and ensure that your points are fully developed with specific examples.
task achievement
You clearly stated your opinion in the introduction and addressed the importance of education for less fortunate students.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is structured into paragraphs, making it easy to follow your main ideas.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • lower-income backgrounds
  • social equity
  • student debt
  • financial liabilities
  • workforce
  • regional disparities
  • higher education
  • quality of education
  • university resources
  • government subsidies
  • scholarships
  • across-the-board
  • affordable education
  • economic benefits
  • educated workforce
  • societal challenges
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