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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent times, saving
money
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 has become crucial for everyone, including teenagers, for a bright future. I largely agree with
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 notion because if
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 save
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 for the future, they can fulfil their dreams and make their families happy. On the one hand, there are many benefits if individuals pay attention to saving their own
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instead
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 of wasting it on unnecessary things.
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, if youngsters save
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 from their pocket
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, they can easily pay their college or university fees. Around 25% of Indian students pay their institution fees by themselves.
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, not only young
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 but
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 middle-aged individuals can save
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 for their health. Nowadays, many
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 suffer from various kinds of diseases, which is why individuals need to save
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 for medical checkups.
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, they may not become trouble for their family members and they can pay their own hospital bills.
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, If folks save currency from their childhood
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 they become disciplined or make any decisions easily related to spending
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.
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 one survey, around 34% of kids make their own decisions regarding buying or spending on stuff. In conclusion, no doubt
people
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 should use
money
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 on necessary things, but saving
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 is more important in our day-to-day
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 these reasons, parents should teach their offspring to save
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 for their future at
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 early age.

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coherence and cohesion
Strengthen the connection between your points by using more cohesive devices, such as transitional phrases to enhance the flow of ideas.
task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments, particularly in the second body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance clarity in some sentences to ensure each point is communicated effectively, especially when discussing financial discipline among young people.
task achievement
You presented a clear position on the topic and organized your ideas effectively in paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction provides a strong outline of your argument and clearly states your agreement with the importance of saving for the future.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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