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Many people are changing their careers. what are the reasons for changing? and can there be any positive or negative impact by person or by society as whole.

Nowadays,
people
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 tend to switch
jobs
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 more commonly than before. Since
,
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 individuals are seeking personal
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 rather than
stuck
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being stuck
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 on
societial
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social
 stigma regarding career choices compared to the past. In my opinion,
this
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 development has more benefits than drawbacks to the society and
people
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.
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 with, one of the major reasons for the rise in career shifts is the individual's late realization about actual interest
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 their lives. Even though late,
people
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 eventually find their career path, that actually
fulfills
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 their inner-self.
Due to
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 high social pressure,
people
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often
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are often
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 forced to opt for
blue-colllar
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blue-collar
jobs
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. Yet, in the contemporary world, thanks to advanced technologies, it
became
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 more easy to learn new skills and achieve new
jobs
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,
moreover
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, they can even earn it online.
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, an individual who like to change their profession from
teaching
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the teaching
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feild
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field
 to
interior
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the interior
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 designing sector, there are multiple universities that
offers
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 e-learning.
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, individuals
does
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 not have to fear
while
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 switching their
jobs
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, concerning qualifications or financial strains.
Furthermore
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, if we discuss the influence of
this
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 trend by person and by society, the positive impacts will
favor
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favour
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 it more.
Firstly
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, the impacts in
individual
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the individual
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 aspect are
much
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benefical
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beneficial
 as
it
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they
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 can increase awareness about the significance of personal growth and job satisfaction.
This
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 can encourage
individual
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the individual
an individual
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 to
thrive
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strive
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 towards their personal
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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, rather than feeling restrained in their life.
Consequently
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, it can help to boost
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overall
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the overall
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 well-being of
people
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 by maintaining both good
physicial
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physical
 and mental health.
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, someone who
compelled
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is compelled
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 to continue in a profession which is not appealing
for
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to
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 them can
burnout
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burn out
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 their physical capacity
as well as
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it
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apply
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can
leads
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lead
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 to depression. Another
,
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 positive impact is innovation on the societal level.
Diverse
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A diverse
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 range of experience in the workforce will be favourable and useful to the community. In conclusion, today, more and more
people
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began
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began to
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 change their
jobs
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,
while
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 prioritising personal gratification and development, owing to, rapid technological advancements and contemporary
attitude
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attitudes
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.
Therefore
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, the
overall
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 outcome of
this
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 development
seem
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 to have
positive
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a positive
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 impact on the individuals and the society, as it helps one to reflect on their choices in life.

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The essay successfully addresses both parts of the task regarding reasons for changing careers and potential impacts on society.
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The introduction effectively outlines your opinion and sets the stage for the discussion that follows.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career mobility
  • Professional development
  • Reskilling and upskilling
  • Job market fluctuation
  • Workforce diversification
  • Vocational satisfaction
  • Economic restructuring
  • Lifelong learning
  • Financial uncertainty
  • Social adaptation
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