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The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
table
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 indicates the change
of
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in
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passenger's
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passenger
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 numbers taking the seven most famous airlines in the US between 1995 and 2005. Except shows the practical numbers, the
table
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also
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 gives the ratio of
growing
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that Delta Air Lines still was the
customers
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' first choice through
this
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 decade with twice
population
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the population
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 increase. In
the
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contrast, JetBlue Airways demonstrated
the
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a
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 significant growth proportion in 2005 with almost
two
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 and half times as much
as
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apply
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population
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the population
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than
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in
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 1995.
Look
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 at the data of the
table
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, Delta Ari Lines had an obvious
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customers
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customer
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 increase with fifty
thousands
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thousand
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 people during the decade with
percentage
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the percentage
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 of 113%, remaining its first-ranking status.
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, the three of the figures, American, Alaska and Hawaiian, represented an enormous trend upward as well, with 127%, 114% and 150% respectively.
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 the
table
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, the
two
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 of the figures, Southwest and United, were the only
two
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 airlines
didn't
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that didn't
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 reach the
two
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 times growth in
this
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 period with only 60% and 33%,
however
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, they still were the
customers
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' second and third priority in 2005.
Whereas
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,
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 JetBlue was the most unpopular
airlines
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airline
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 in 1995 with only eighty-six
thousands
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thousand
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customers
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, it made the highest proportions of growth with 249% in 2005.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, customers, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Passenger numbers
  • Airline growth
  • Significant decline
  • Top performers
  • Economy class
  • Customer preferences
  • Market share
  • Overtaken
  • Trends
  • Hypothesize
  • Factors influencing
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