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he chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

he chart below shows the results survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given bar chart shows percentages of
peoplw
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people
 who purchased
coffee
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 and tea, in five different cities
of
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in
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Austarlia
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Australia
.
Overall
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,it is clearly seen that the highest percentages of purchasing
coffee
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 and tea from
cafe
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cafes
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4
week
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weeks
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 were highest
compare
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compared
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 to other
one
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ones
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,
such
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 as fresh and instant
coffee
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. In
details
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detail
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, the popularity
went to
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of
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coffee
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center
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centers
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 for
bevarges
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beverages
were
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was
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 highest,across
the
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apply
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all cities in Australia,
however
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 in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart
city
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City
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 the
perecnt
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percentage
 was just above 60.
Similarly
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, in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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 the ratio was under 60%, like 55% and 50% respectively.
Moreover
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, purchasing instant
coffee
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 shows a positive trend. Hobart has the highest percentage, around 64%. Meanwhile, only about half of the people bought instant
coffee
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 in the remaining areas of Australia.
In contrast
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,the proportion of buying fresh
coffee
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 was under 45% in
the
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all cities.The highest
ration
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ratio
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 was in
Sydeny
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Sydney
.
whereas
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,In Briston and Adeline the percentage was almost
same
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the same
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, just 35%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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