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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation

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In many nations, a number of
individuals
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 prefer to live in their own homes rather than
rent
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 one. There are several reasons for
this
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 as a sense of happiness, security, and the fact that it is generally considered a positive trend. On the one hand, there is no doubt that having
a
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 own home gives
individuals
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 a sense of security and safety. Most
people
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 work hard to buy their own property,
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 as an apartment or a condo. The main reason is that if
individuals
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 live on their own property, they do not have to worry about paying
rent
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.
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, they can decorate their home
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 their taste, which is not always possible in rental properties.
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 one survey, around 60% of
people
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 preferred to live in their own house rather than spend money on a rented property.
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, I believe
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 is a positive trend because when
people
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 buy their own properties, they contribute to the development of their country's economy through taxes.
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, when
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 purchase a new house
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 they are required to pay taxes and other fees to the government, which can help in the development of the country to some extent.
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, many
people
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 may be going into depression if they cannot afford to pay their
rent
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.
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,
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 the Times of India, almost 30% of citizens commit suicide
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 their inability to pay
rent
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, and
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 percentage is increasing day by day. In conclusion, many
people
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 prefer to buy a sweet house to feel more comfortable and spend quality time with their family members. ChatGPT said:

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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