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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agrer or disagree with this statemnet? Zhazira.

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In the coming years,
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 of people who read
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
book
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books
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 will decrease,
as a
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 they will have access to read everything on the Web without no
costs
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. I strongly agree with the idea
thatbuying
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that buying
 in online is more
convenience
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 and do not need extra
charge
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. From my point of view, nowadays considerable readers prefer to buy books and newspapers through
on
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the network for it there are several apps for ordering online. Because, to buy books you do not need to stay in the queue and wait for
a
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long hours.
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, one of the common digital
network
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networks
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 among teenagers and adults
it
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is
app
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an app
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 called 2Books,
its
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 attracted a lot of people of its amenity and having amount numbers of tome.
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,
its
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 useful for people who are starting to learn English. The reason why readers tend to read on
network
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networks
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 is that because it
do
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 not ask extra charge. These days the cost of reference
book
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books
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 increased
than
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to
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 previous years,
it
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which
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 prevents
to
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many audiences
to
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from
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 not allow lack of cash.
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, the website by named engoo.ru recently published that
percentage
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 of book lovers declined to about 50%
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 its expensive for social. Eventually, they now read e-books because they are more affordable and offer a wide selection of press.
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, reading
in
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online is more convenient and cost-effective for everyone. One of the benefits of e-books is that they offer a lot of choices and
suitable
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are suitable
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 for both kids and adults.

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task achievement
Ensure your thesis statement clearly states your position on the topic. Make it explicit that you agree with the idea presented in the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and ensure subject-verb agreement in your sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Improve the clarity of your examples, explaining how they support your main arguments.
task achievement
You presented your opinions clearly and supported them with examples.
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Your essay topic is relevant and engaging for modern readers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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