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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides information about the
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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 who
staying
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stayed
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 on
crusine
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cruise
cuisine
cruising
 and
island
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 at a specific Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the data reveals that the
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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was
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increased
signifcantly
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significantly
 in both
type
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types
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 of
visiting
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visit
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 so the total
amount was
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number
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also
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 considerable growth. In 2010, the initial amount of
people
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 staying on cruise ships and
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island
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islands
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 started at 0.25 and 1
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millions
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million
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people
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, respectively.
People
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 who chose to stay
on
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in
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floating
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the floating
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hotel
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hotels
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 had a
silghtly
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similar
fluctuate
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,
then
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 there was a considerable increase from around 0.25 to 1.25
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millions
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million
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people
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in
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from
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 2012 to 2015. The
number
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 of
island
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tourist
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tourists
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 had a moderate growth to 1.5
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millions
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million
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people
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 after that the graph remained at the same level until 2015.
Morover
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Moreover
, between 2015 and 2016 there was
a
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 equal
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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number
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 of
both
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apply
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tourists who stayed in
boat
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boats
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 and
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island
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islands
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 at approximately 1.3
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millions
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million
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people
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. From 2016 onward, the
number
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 of
people
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 intended to stay
ar
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at
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 floating
hotel
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hotels
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 outrace those of
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island
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the island
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, which ended in 2017 at 2 and 1.5
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millions
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million
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people
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, respectively. Turning to the combination amount between
people
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 who intended to stay on cruise ships and
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on island
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island
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islands
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, the graph started at 1
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millions
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million
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people
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then
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and then
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 skyrocketed to
roughtly
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roughly
 2.75
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millions
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million
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people
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. The
number
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 stayed at the same level for 1
years
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year
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 and ended with 3.5
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millions
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million
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people
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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