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The organic food market is growing every year. Some claim that buying and consuming foods labelled "organic" ha many advantages. Others, however, feel that "organic" food is false advertising, and offers no significant benefits over non-organic food. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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these days, healthy
people
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taking
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eating
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the
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organic
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, because it has more
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advantages
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 for their
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bodies
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can'
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 believe that it is
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real advertising, and
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t
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benefit
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. So, in
this
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give reasons for each
my
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answer
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answers
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, and give my own opinion. On the one
han
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hand
, individuals buy
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organic
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 for many reasons,
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, because some
people
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make
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they
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take
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organic
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,
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help
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loss
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wieght
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weight
, but in
correct
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way
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organic
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by
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from
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doctor
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, before, they do
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the diet
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, they should ask a
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due to
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 he or she supports them to follow their
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right
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way
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 reason is
about
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that
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 that
help
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helps
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 them to be healthy, they will be active and they
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won't
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problem
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problems
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 in their body,
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it
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they
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doesn'
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won't
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won't
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, it will grow and be more healthy,
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, their bone will be strong.
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, some
persons
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people
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 think that
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organic
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,
it
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hasn'
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 true
benefit
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benefits
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dangerous
of
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to
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healthy
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health
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,
may be
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maybe
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idea
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an idea
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and
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it and
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, so they don'
t
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, if they have
diet
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a diet
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system
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, they don'
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of
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about
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this
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system
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t
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doctor
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 without planning,
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 of
this
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their
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food
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In
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mantain
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maintain
 of their health, they will eat
healty
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healthy
food
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as
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 fruit and
vegtables
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vegetables
, and drink water ,
milk
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and milk
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, and
also
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, their
food
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 should make by
themselve
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themselves
, because they can control
of
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the oil and
suger
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sugar
. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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people
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 can buy
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organic
food
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 , but before they buy it, they should ask
people
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 who have
an
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experince
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experience
 or ask a
doctor
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, because it will support them to get beneficial more without any
problem
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problems
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of
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with
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 their health.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the topic and presents a clear thesis statement. This will help guide the reader and frame your arguments more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Work on structuring your paragraphs more logically. Each paragraph should ideally focus on a single main idea supported by examples or explanations to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of grammar and spelling, as errors can distract from your ideas. Consider revising phrases for clarity and accuracy, like 'maintain their hair from fall' to 'prevent hair loss'.
task achievement
You have made a good effort to outline both sides of the argument, which demonstrates an understanding of the task requirements.
task achievement
Including examples related to health benefits shows that you have thought about the topic and can relate it to real-life situations, which adds depth to your arguments.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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