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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 we see now I will summarize the information for the children’s charity located in the USA
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 one year,
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 begin with the
revenue
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 sources the total is 53,561,580 Dollars. On the other
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 we see
its
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 almost the same amount but in the
revenue
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sources
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 we can see that 86.6% donated food 10.4% community contributions and only 2.2% program
revenue
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. In the
Expenditures
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 we can see the different 95.8% program services, 2.6% fundraising and 1.6% management
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general the
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 is the Expenditures focus on program services but the
revenue
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 sources focus on donated food because
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they
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programing
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 services and the community.
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own opinions
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 ideas and I respect that but
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 we know the foos is very important to kids that what make
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 grow up and that
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 I can say for today.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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