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Some people believe that e-library are good another believe that traditional libraries are better than

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As we all know, nowadays there are people who prefer electronic libraries
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 those who believe the best choice is traditional ones. In
this
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 essay, we will try to find the best. I will start by looking at the advantages of e-libraries. One of the major plus points is that
this
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 type of bibliotheca gives a chance people to read any type of
book
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 from their comfort zone
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themselves
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.
Secondly
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, e-books are
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 higher quality than paper ones. Because paper books may tear or degrade in quality during the reading process. The downside of the e-library is that the people how more read e-books, it negatively affect their eyes.
On the other hand
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, traditional libraries
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 have enough pros and cons. The biggest advantage of traditional bibliotheca is that you can communicate with other
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 readers and consolidate your knowledge and
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 helps to develop skills that are important to you
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 as communication and teamwork. The first drawback of the usual reading place is that you cannot always go there
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 when the weather freezes or
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 hot and the library day off. Another major disadvantage is a
book
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 which you want to read may be read by another reader
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 of
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 you may have to wait for it.
To sum up
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, it might be said that there are advantages and disadvantages of each bibliotheca. E-library provides speed and comfort and traditional libraries give a chance to get a clear feel for the
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. So everyone can choose anyone
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 their needs

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Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in the introduction that outlines the main points of the essay. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly connect your ideas using transition words or phrases. This will improve the flow of your essay.
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Try to avoid generalizations and instead provide specific examples or personal experiences to support your points. This can strengthen your argument.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective on the topic.
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Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and the relevant pros and cons of both e-libraries and traditional libraries.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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